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Lyrics Thread
« on: May 13, 2012, 07:44:40 pm »
Since I've got some lyrics I'd like critiques of, I thought it'd be a neat idea to start a lyrics thread, in case anyone else is looking for similar reviews. It could probably merge with some other poetry thread, but the necessity/desire of adding music seemed like enough of a distinction to justify a separate thread.

Wrote this last night because I couldn't sleep. Some pretty bad memories/fears surfaced that I just couldn't get rid of, so this is what came of it. Musically, I'm working up some diminished/harmonic minor riffs to accentuate the dark topic and fit stylistically within (or at least near) some kind of death metal. It's a take on the song The Flame by Chimaira.

=Into Oblivion=
Discarded and terrified
Shaking from a nightmare brought to everlasting life
Abandoned in shadows by the malice of the beast
Cold and alone
Afraid to trust the hands of safety
Violated trust to match a violated body
 
Target of opportunity
Innocence beholden like a gift on this dark night
All alone and crying out in a voice only demons hear
Discarded and used
Consumed and thrown in the gutter
No concern for devastated security
 
Undying hatred will scream your name
As you are torn limb from limb
 
Take a ride into the depths of oblivion
Where vengeance is wrought on the soul of the coward
Death a relief not given for eons
Unending nightmare for those who prey on the weak
 
Afraid to move
Terror hiding within each new shadow
A replaying nightmare destroys the image of safety
Isolated in fear
No way to forget the events of that night
Slow to overcome the lingering horror
 
Undying hatred will scream your name
As you are torn limb from limb
 
Take a ride into the depths of oblivion
Where vengeance is wrought on the soul of the coward
Death a relief not given for eons
Unending nightmare for those who prey on the weak
 
Feel the void caress you
As retribution gets its first taste
The essense of madness awaits you
Revel in its sweet embrace
Pain the only dying gods have known
Evisceration of a bastard's mind
 
Undying hatred will scream your name
As you are torn limb from limb
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There are a number of ways, though my favourite is simply to take them by surprise. They're just walking down the street, minding their own business when suddenly, WHACK! Penis to the face.